*Oh—we are assuming this great passion is unrequited, are we?" THAT was British. But if you change the end to "aren't we?" or just "unrequited, right?" it conveys the same message in conventional American English.*
Funny, isn't it, what subtleties there are! Ok. I'll go with 'right', it sounds suitably Justin-informal to me. How about 'grand' instead of 'great' passion?
* He rather thought...* Yes, I should have picked up that one myself. It does feel British, somehow.
*we don't use "putting it on", I'm trying to think of HOW the USA would say it...* Curses! I suppose 'trying it on' is not going to work either. It's a good phrase. You should use it! What about 'put one over on Lance'?
*He was trying to fool Lance, but there was a wicked little twinkle in those big blue eyes that proved his woeful expression to be a lie. (This one would take some discussion & explanation, comment me back if you want to open that can tin of worms. You =SO= don't have that expression in Jolly Old England, do you? lol*
Ok, I'll bite! Subtleties? (We do have and use the 'can of worms' expression, possibly having acquired it from the US?)
*I don't know the DC/Maryland dialect to say for certain how he would re-phrase, but a "got" after "haven't" is easiest.*
Would 'haven't got' be better than 'don't have'?
*Diaries are what little girls lock up...* urk! I should have used the PDA somehow, but this is a 'flashlight' for me. (Which means, I wrote an ID4 fanfic, and had my heroine prowling her house for a torch - fortunately my American advisor said this sounded a little more medieval than was appropriate and I think I've always remembered to use a flashlight since. Okay, no diaries for big boys!) Meanwhile, shall I go with 'schedule' or 'calendar'?
This is MOST HELPFUL! I have a tendency to lapse into Georgette Heyer-ish (ie distinctly old-fashioned) English, which is quite the wrong idiom. I also forgot to Americanise the spellings (computers are good at that), oops. (I wasn't seriously expecting anyone except interlock to get much out of this, it's most gratifying to have found that someone else enjoys the story too!)
Um, would you do this again? For Broken? It's just the kind of checking I need.
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THAT was British. But if you change the end to "aren't we?" or just "unrequited, right?" it conveys the same message in conventional American English.*
Funny, isn't it, what subtleties there are! Ok. I'll go with 'right', it sounds suitably Justin-informal to me. How about 'grand' instead of 'great' passion?
* He rather thought...* Yes, I should have picked up that one myself. It does feel British, somehow.
*we don't use "putting it on", I'm trying to think of HOW the USA would say it...*
Curses! I suppose 'trying it on' is not going to work either. It's a good phrase. You should use it! What about 'put one over on Lance'?
*He was trying to fool Lance, but there was a wicked little twinkle in those big blue eyes that proved his woeful expression to be a lie. (This one would take some discussion & explanation, comment me back if you want to open that can tin of worms. You =SO= don't have that expression in Jolly Old England, do you? lol*
Ok, I'll bite! Subtleties? (We do have and use the 'can of worms' expression, possibly having acquired it from the US?)
*I don't know the DC/Maryland dialect to say for certain how he would re-phrase, but a "got" after "haven't" is easiest.*
Would 'haven't got' be better than 'don't have'?
*Diaries are what little girls lock up...* urk! I should have used the PDA somehow, but this is a 'flashlight' for me. (Which means, I wrote an ID4 fanfic, and had my heroine prowling her house for a torch - fortunately my American advisor said this sounded a little more medieval than was appropriate and I think I've always remembered to use a flashlight since. Okay, no diaries for big boys!) Meanwhile, shall I go with 'schedule' or 'calendar'?
This is MOST HELPFUL! I have a tendency to lapse into Georgette Heyer-ish (ie distinctly old-fashioned) English, which is quite the wrong idiom. I also forgot to Americanise the spellings (computers are good at that), oops. (I wasn't seriously expecting anyone except
Um, would you do this again? For Broken? It's just the kind of checking I need.
*beams*