Healing Hands

[pensnest]

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[superboner.livejournal.com]

That ending was SPECTACULAR. Loved it. The style of writing took me a little while to get into, but once I figured out what the narrator's perspective was, I could really get into the story. It was a beautiful characterization. Thank you for the good read.

[pensnest]

Thank you! It isn't at all my usual kind of thing, but that's the fun of writing challenges.

[galerian-ash.livejournal.com]

Oh, wow. This story really hit close to home for me (being an overweight and scaley woman whose unfaithful boyfriend just dumped her). Your main character was extremely unpleasant; but I mean that in the best way possible. To me, there's always some little thing I can find in a character to like or relate to, but you somehow managed with the amazing feat of making her completely cruel and mean.

I loved the way you wrote this, it felt very fresh and original. Despite the fact that there was no dialogue, everything was still very clear and easy to understand what was going on.

Great job, I'm really impressed!

[pensnest]

Thank you so much for the feedback - I'm so glad it was always clear what was going on. I'm overweight and psoriasis-ridden myself, in fact, the treatment is something I had a course of a couple of years ago, which seemed to fit the prompts very well. It was really fun writing from the POV of someone I don't like!

[mercury-quirks.livejournal.com]

Excellent work with the voice of the character. Perfect little bitch, isn't she? And I agree, amazing ending. I wasn't expecting it at all, even though I probably should've been. Loved the story. Love getting into character's heads like this, no matter how despicable they are(although I do suppose there is a limit).

[pensnest]

Thank you! It's enjoyable to write someone that outright selfish - a nice break from my normal saintliness ;-)

[seshat2511.livejournal.com]

I loved this! The voice, the ending, the meanness...I loved all of it! I thought the almost `stream of consciousness` style fit the story perfectly, and the ending...daaamn! :D I have to admit to laughing out loud at it, even though a part of me felt horribly guilty for being amused, but I think I just have a weakness for unrepentantly bad characters. Excellent story.

[pensnest]

Heh! Many thanks for the feedback - I'm glad to have made you laugh!

[ephemera-tales.livejournal.com]

ohh she is gorgiously nasty, and The Girlfriend is so vivid through her eyes. Very very nicely done.

[pensnest]

Thanks! And thank you again for providing the impetus. I seem to write with much more determination when there is (a) an external spark, and (b) a deadline.

[runzu.livejournal.com]

That was fucking brilliant! I really liked the character even though it'd probably be someone I wouldn't care for in RL. :)

[pensnest]

Well, hi! How did you come to find yourself over here? And thanks for the feedback!

[runzu.livejournal.com]

I was at your website going through your fiction and saw original fiction. I was like, hmm...

You should write more of it. You're really good at it. You should have a fiction press account. :P